Now it had been many a day since Aladdin and the sultan's daughter had returned from Africa, having defeated the evil magician by tricking him into drinking a poisoned glass of wine, and the happy couple had ruled over their kingdom and lived very well in their palace. However, unbeknownst to Aladdin and the sultan's daughter, the evil magician had a brother who was supposedly even more wicked than the brother Aladdin had dealt with so long ago. This man was cunning, decisive, and cruel to the extreme. Knowing the secrets of the jinn from having practiced magic for so long, he knew the very thing that would be able to destroy Aladdin and his kingdom for having killed his brother. So, he dressed a divine, holy woman and entered the kingdom, arriving at the gates of the palace to meet with Aladdin in order to bestow a blessing from the Gods themselves. After being granted their audience with Aladdin and the sultan's daughter, the brother in disguise convinces the sultan's daughter to request a hanging roc's egg in the palace for protection and prosperity, and Aladdin, not wanting his darling love to be left unfulfilled, asks the jinn to grant his wish. At this request, the jinn begins yelling and cursing at Aladdin for such a dangerous and evil wish, as the roc is the jinn's master. Unable to listen to reason because of his immense anger, the jinn unleashes his full potential of magic into the kingdom, wiping its very existence out of the scope of this world and history, leaving only a well-polished oil lamp in the sands of the now barren desert.
Author's Note: I began with the part of Reading B of Arabian Nights where Aladdin and the sultan's daughter are together and living in prosperity, and the magician's brother returns Asia to destroy Aladdin with his wish. I changed some of the details so that the jinn's rage is too great and he is unable to see the deception from the magician's brother.
Bibliography: Scheherazade, Arabian Nights.
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Hey there Chase,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this read! I thought that your story was very intriguing. I liked the way that you had the characters in your story set up. This story really did a good job at keeping the reader reading. I really enjoyed the picture you had at the beginning of the story, I thought it was very captivating.
Hello Chase,
ReplyDeleteI liked this story a lot! I think deception is always a very interesting topic in stories and this one is a prime example of that. I also liked how descriptive you were as it really helped me get a vision of what was going on. Also, I believe the sentence that starts with "So, he dressed a divine," is a run-on. Other than that, the story was awesome and so are you!
Hey again Chase!
ReplyDeleteGreat story. A very cool adaptation of such a classic tale. I enjoyed how it started right in the middle of things and still laid out a story that I could follow. A couple grammar stuff in there, may want to run a spell check or read out loud if you want this in your portfolio or storybook!
Hey Chase!
ReplyDeleteI liked your story from beginning to end! I was intrigued by the beginning when it set the scene for the story, then at the end I was blown away! The character of the magician's brother is fascinating, and I enjoyed your depiction of him. Try looking at this story more carefully for some grammar issues.
Hi there Chase!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story, and I found it very interesting! Maybe you could clarify some things for me, since I wasn't familiar with some of the terms in the story, like roc and jinn. Sometimes readers are able to pick up on the meaning of unfamiliar words through context, but sometimes a brief explanation really helps keep people in the loop!
-Kate
Hello, Chase!
ReplyDeleteI also read the Arabian Nights stories and greatly enjoyed what you did with this one! I absolutely did not expect that ending--very shocking and unexpected! I enjoyed your writing style and how you made the story your own, especially with that great and original ending! For some reason, there being just a lamp left in the middle of the desert strikes me as funny!
Great job and I look forward to reading the rest of your work this semester!
Hello again Chase,
ReplyDeleteWow, I have never read Arabian Nights, but by the way you are telling it, I can tell it is intense. In Aladdin, the story leaves off with the couple living happily ever after. In this one, everything ends with the jinn's rage. I like how at the end, there was a lamp left in its place. Your author's note really helped me understand the original was like! Hope to read more of your stories soon!